What do you think of the excerpt of my story?

The concept of Applegate, a city with beatiful, perfect people, is pretty cliche, as well as the girl who doesn't fit in. I have to say I don't like the character Victoria Vanderblit much-she seems too whiny. And if a reader doesn't like your protagonist when the book is in first person, it's over. But this is only the beginning, most beginnings are cliche, and I would keep reading. You really express the characters feelings well, along with the settings and problems, but if you use that great expression too much it does get to seem like the main character is complaining.